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What have you learned in life recently?

작성자: 류*선
2023-02-02 924

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Recently I learned that comparison with people is like killing my potential and robbing of my hope to grow mentally and spiritually. Jordan Bernt Peterson a clinical psychologist, said "Don't compare yourself to others, only compare yourself to yesterday's you." It is my favorite saying from him. I try to focus on the life that God gave me. However, the process is not easy for me. I compared it with a person who is the other pastor's wife who got a school scholarship than me yesterday. When I heard that her scholarship benefit, I felt like not fair. I complained about its situation. When I felt not good, my husband told me what God gave us until now. He said don't forget about it. I realized when I started comparing myself with people, I already couldn't see what God helped me fulfill. It was a shame. When I avoid seeing spiritual things in God, my soul will kill like that. Hence, I have to pray to seek God's grace for keeping my hope with faith. Thank you, Faith! :)

강사님의 첨삭교정 내용

I see this as a normal reaction, Jane! In this world, we cannot avoid comparing ourselves to others, but it's on how you deal with it with God matters.-Faith-
Recently I learned that comparison with people is like killing my potential and robbing of my hope to grow mentally and spiritually. 
>> Recently, I learned that comparison with people is like killing my potential and robbing me of my hope to grow mentally and spiritually. 
Jordan Bernt Peterson a clinical psychologist, said "Don't compare yourself to others, only compare yourself to yesterday's you." 
>> Jordan Bernt Peterson, a clinical psychologist said, "Don't compare yourself to others, only compare yourself to who you were yesterday." 
It is my favorite saying from him. 
>> CORRECT
I try to focus on the life that God gave me. 
>> CORRECT
However, the process is not easy for me. 
>> CORRECT
I compared it with a person who is the other pastor's wife who got a school scholarship than me yesterday. 
>> I compared myself with the other pastor's wife who got a school scholarship yesterday. 
When I heard that her scholarship benefit, I felt like not fair. 
>> When I heard about her scholarship benefits, I felt like it was not fair. 
I complained about its situation. 
>> CORRECT
When I felt not good, my husband told me what God gave us until now. 
>> When I do not feel good, my husband reminds me of what God has been giving us until now. 
He said don't forget about it. 
>> CORRECT
OR He wanted me to always bear it in mind.
I realized when I started comparing myself with people, I already couldn't see what God helped me fulfill. 
>> I realized that when I started comparing myself with people, I already couldn't see how God helped me fulfill my goals. 
It was a shame. 
>> CORRECT
When I avoid seeing spiritual things in God, my soul will kill like that. 
>> When I avoid seeing spiritual things in God, my soul would be killed like that. 
Hence, I have to pray to seek God's grace for keeping my hope with faith. 
>> Hence, I have to pray to seek God's grace to keep my hope with faith. 
Thank you, Faith! :)
>> CORRECT
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