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Hello.
I ran out of energy today.
There were too many clients in the clinic.
In addition, Dr. Bae chased me all day, so I taught him hardly.
There's been more income today than other days.
It was so happy to me, but I couldn't feel that way, because I was so tired.
Do you get me?
Actually, my eyes almost closed.
There was a good thing.
We succeeded to apply our new treatment for skin in the clinic.
Many patients were satisfied with that.
However, there was a bad thing as well.
My friend who has a cancer texted me that we should delay our meeting, because she almost died and she needs a time to recover.
It is so sad to me, but there is no choice.
About homework,
Of course, I am extrovert.
I like to meet someone and drink together, and also like to play sports or games with others.
As you know that, I have an ability to empathize other's emotion.
I am the most social guy at least among my people.
I can't do social activities these days, though.
You are extrovert as well, I bet.
See you.

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Hello, good morning, Dr.Kim!

Congratulations for raking in a lot of income and touring and teaching Dr. Bae around yesterday. You were tired but very fulfilled because you have been beyond productive. As a result, you may lose a lot of weight nowadays. That's a great way of looking at things on the brighter side. I sometimes feel so beat as well when I still want to do more but my whole body is already giving up. So, yeah, I feel you.

It is such a good thing to have yet another addition to your treatments. Quality treatments are what clients really want and it is what keeps them recommend your clinic to others as well as the reason why they keep coming back. So, stay innovative and abreast with the latest and cutting edge trends.

I am praying for your doctor colleague who has cancel to be free from pain, sorrow, and anxiety. May God give her more courage to live.

As an extrovert myself, th both of us love socializing. We gather energy from others as well as give some to them. This way, there is an equal distribution of energy and multiplies in terms of favors and also very good connections. So, let's stay social not becuase of benefits but because we are innately good people. This way, we can keep the people valuable and vice versa.

Study the grammar suggestions I gave you on your well composed and organized essay. Have a powerful and energized day!

Take care, enjoy your weekend!

-T. Donna~

Hello.
>> Correct!

I ran out of energy today.
>> Correct!

There were too many clients in the clinic.
>> Correct!

In addition, Dr. Bae chased me all day, so I taught him hardly.
>> Correct!

There's been more income today than other days.
>> Correct!
Or: There's been more income today than the other days.

It was so happy to me, but I couldn't feel that way, because I was so tired.
>> I was so happy (It was a very happy time for me), but I couldn't feel that way because I was so tired.
 
Do you get me?
>> Correct!

Actually, my eyes almost closed.
>> Correct!

There was a good thing.
>> Correct!

We succeeded to apply our new treatment for skin in the clinic.
>> Correct!

Many patients were satisfied with that.
>> Correct!

However, there was a bad thing as well.
>> Correct!

My friend who has a cancer texted me that we should delay our meeting, because she almost died and she needs a time to recover.
>> Correct!

It is so sad to me, but there is no choice.
>> Correct!

About homework,
Of course, I am extrovert.
>> About the homework, of course I am an extrovert.

I like to meet someone and drink together, and also like to play sports or games with others.
>> Correct!

As you know that, I have an ability to empathize other's emotion.
>> As you know it, I have an ability to empathize to other's emotions.

I am the most social guy at least among my people.
>> Correct!

I can't do social activities these days, though.
>> Correct!

You are extrovert as well, I bet.
>> Correct!

See you.
>> Correct!
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