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Starting my own business have a lot of risk.
It cost a lot of money to do your own business.
You might not get back your business cost.
Like office rental, furniture,machine and so on.
Sometimes your damage can bigger than Price of expensive house.
You must pay salary to your labors even if you didn¡¯t make money.
So You should be careful to start your own business.

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Hi there, Ms. Sunny!
I totally agreed and admired your viewpoint here People who are bold and ready to take risks are the ones who need to engage in business. These people are also the ones who don't want to work for others.
Thank you for doing your homework. See you!
Aki~

Starting my own business have a lot of risk. 
>>> Starting my own business has a lot of risks. 

It cost a lot of money to do your own business.
>>> CORRECT!

You might not get back your business cost.
>>> CORRECT!

Like office rental, furniture,machine and so on.
>>> CORRECT!

Sometimes your damage can bigger than Price of expensive house.
>>> Sometimes your damage can be bigger than the price of an expensive house.

You must pay salary to your labors even if you didn¡¯t make money.
>>>  You must pay a salary to your laborers even if you didn¡¯t make money.

So You should be careful to start your own business.
>>> CORRECT!
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