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I think so. And I think motivation is most important thing to achieve something. Motivation makes someone to interest in something, think about something whole day. Motivation is reason for why people work hard.
When I was student, my motivation was passing the test. After graduating, I couldn¡¯t find motivation for studying for long time.
My family gave me a energy when I failed.

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Good evening, Mr. Son. I appreciate you taking the time to check out the feedback and the homework topic. Thank you for sharing your thoughts and your own life experience regarding the topic. You did very well and if you have any questions about the corrections, we can talk about it in class. See you at the next one. ~Jane <",


I think so. And I think motivation is most important thing to achieve something. 
>> I think motivation is the most important thing in achieving something. 

Motivation makes someone to interest in something, think about something whole day. 
>> Motivation keeps someone interested in something and it keeps them thinking about it the whole day. 

Motivation is reason for why people work hard.
>> Motivation is the reason people work hard. 

When I was student, my motivation was passing the test. 
>> When I was a student, my motivation was to pass the test. 

After graduating, I couldn¡¯t find motivation for studying for long time.
>> After graduation, I couldn't find the motivation to study for a long time. 

My family gave me a energy when I failed.
>> My family encouraged me when I failed. 
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