무료 레벨테스트 받고 강사평가 남기면 1,OOO원 쿠폰 즉시 적립!

혹시 사이트에선 찾지 못한 궁금한 점이 있으세요?
남겨주신 이메일을 통해 답변 드리겠습니다.

문의하신 내용이 문자로 발송되오니
연락처를 남겨주세요.
업무시간 월~금 오전9시~오후6시
(점심시간 낮12시~오후1시)

영작교정 게시판

영어 말하기와 쓰기를 동시에 잡는다!

자신 있게 쓸 수 있는 영작문을 위해 파워잉글리쉬 수업을 수강하시는
회원님들께 무료로 제공해드리는 부가 서비스로, 전문 분야를 제외한 자유 주제
또는 강사님이 내주시는 과제를 회원님께서 영어로 작성해주시면,
담당 강사 님께서 ‘문법 오류 교정’ 과 ‘더 나은 영어식 표현’으로 교정해주는
서비스 입니다.

What was my best travel experience and Why?

작성자: 이*진
2023-02-10 1285

회원님의 영작문

What was my best travel experience and Why?

Every travel experience has a different meaning, so it could be chosen according to a current feeling and situation. Well while I am writing my essay, I just think of kids in my mind. It pushes me to pick up the travel experience with kids me.

The current and best experience is the glamping to Pine-velly in Pocheun with the three of us. There are reasons why I chose this.

Firstly, it was my first experience glamping with kids. At that time, I wonder if I could cook, play, and take care of kids for 2 days, but there were many kids with their own families. It was just like the playground in the residential community. So, that trip became a safe, enjoyable, and memorable one for me and the kids.

Secondly, I could see how my kids socialized with unknown friends. They turned out to be introverted within a group. So this trip thought me that I should be more patient and give time to get started something new.

강사님의 첨삭교정 내용

Thanks for this Sir Kiljin! Experiences are definitely better when shared with people you care about.

Every travel experience has a different meaning, so it could be chosen according to a current feeling and situation. 
>>> correct.
>>> OR:  Every travel experience has a different meaning, so it could depend on the current feeling and situation.  
Well while I am writing my essay, I just think of kids in my mind. 
>>> OR: Well, while I am writing my essay, I just thought of the kids. 
It pushes me to pick up the travel experience with kids me.
>>It pushes me to pick the travel experience I had with the kids.
>>> OR: It gave me the drive to choose the travel experience with my kids.   
The current and best experience is the glamping to Pine-valley in Pocheon with the three of us. 
>>>  correct 
There are reasons why I chose this.
>>>  correct   
Firstly, it was my first experience glamping with kids. 
>>>  correct   
At that time, I wonder if I could cook, play, and take care of kids for 2 days, but there were many kids with their own families. 
>>>  correct   
It was just like the playground in the residential community. 
>>>  correct   
So, that trip became a safe, enjoyable, and memorable one for me and the kids.
>>>   correct  
Secondly, I could see how my kids socialized with unknown friends. 
>>>   correct  
They turned out to be introverted within a group. 
>>> correct  
So this trip thought me that I should be more patient and give time to get started something new.
>>So this trip thought me that I should be more patient and give time to get them started with something new.  

번호 제목 글쓴이 공개 상태 등록일 조회수
126313 2023-3/7 HOMEWORK 이*유 완료 2023-03-07 1105
126312 What is the best advantage of your current exercise routine?... 김*진 완료 2023-03-07 4
126311 Hobbies 장*은 완료 2023-03-07 1176
126310 unit 6. homework 공*우 완료 2023-03-07 1078
126309 Do schools do enough to prevent bullying? Why or why not? 구*우 완료 2023-03-07 1301
126308 Homework 김*님 완료 2023-03-07 1038
126307 homework 03.07 최*� 완료 2023-03-07 1165
126306 Sua Lee 이*아 완료 2023-03-07 1207
126305 Homework 이*연 완료 2023-03-07 1164
126304 Do you think you are good at time management? Do you always do... 이*혜 완료 2023-03-07 3
126303 Is education only for the young? What do people learn when they... 김*민 완료 2023-03-07 3
126302 Hw 최*준 완료 2023-03-07 1413
126301 I want to tell other students m learning English… 김*윤 완료 2023-03-07 1527
126300 homework 신*현 완료 2023-03-07 0
126299 Homework 김*숙 완료 2023-03-07 1190
126298 Hw 최*현 완료 2023-03-07 1464
126297 How do you act when you are happy? Do you like being around... 신*섭 완료 2023-03-07 1532
126296 homework 채*서 완료 2023-03-07 1111
126295 HOMEWORK FOR TODAY: DIRECTION: Choose the most suitable adverb... 앨* 완료 2023-03-07 1
126294 Homework 에*미 완료 2023-03-07 1

HOW TO USE IT?

[마이페이지 > 수업 내용 보기 > 학습 캘린더 > 영작교정 버튼 클릭]

수업 횟수만큼 영작교정 게시판이 생성되며,
지난 날짜에도 게시 할 수 있습니다.

주5회 수업 : 월 20회 이용 가능
주3회 수업 : 월 12회 이용 가능
주2회 수업 : 월 08회 이용 가능
01
교정 내용은 최대 1,000byte까지 올릴 수 있습니다.

첨부 파일은 원활한 첨삭을 위한 참고자료로 사용될 뿐,
파일에 대한 첨삭은 불가능 합니다.

업로드 가능한 첨부 파일은 최대 2mb까지이며,
첨부 할 수 있는 파일 형식은 다음과 같습니다.

문서 - PDF, TXT, DOCX,
이미지 - JPEG, PNG, GIF
02
전문 분야를 제외한 회원님이 직접 작성한 글만
첨삭이 가능하며,

올려주신 글의 강사님 첨삭은 24시간 이내에
완료 되는 것을 원칙으로 하고 있습니다.
03
하루 게시 가능한 글은 3회까지 이며,
종료된 수업의 영작교정 게시판은
이용이 어려운 점 양해 부탁 드립니다.
04