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Q1. What were the good choices you made?

A1. I think the good choice that I made is to train hard because it makes me healthy.

Q2. How about the bad ones?

A2. I think the bad choice that I made is to give up studying World history because it made my history score in the previous exam low.

Q3. Why did you choose to study English?

A3. I chose to study English because English was interesting when I learned it for the first time.

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Hi Geonha, 
One of the most important aspects of life is 'decision making', and every choice involves making the right decision. Consistently making good decisions is arguably the most important habit we can develop. Our choices affect our health, our safety, our relationships, how we spend our time, and our overall well-being. ~ Teacher QUENNY

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Q1. What were the good choices you made?
>>What were the good choices you made? (CORRECT) 
A1. I think the good choice that I made is to train hard because it makes me healthy.
A1. I think a good choice that I made was to train hard because it makes me healthy.
Q2. How about the bad ones?
>> How about the bad ones? (CORRECT)
A2. I think the bad choice that I made is to give up studying World history because it made my history score in the previous exam low.
>> A2. I think a bad choice that I made was to give up studying World history because it made my history score low in the previous exam. 
Q3. Why did you choose to study English?
>> Q3. Why did you choose to study English? (CORRECT) 
A3. I chose to study English because English was interesting when I learned it for the first time.
>> A3. I chose to study English because English I became interested in English when I learned it for the first time.
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Q1. What were the good choices you made?

A1. I think the good choice that I made is to train hard because it makes me healthy.

Q2. How about the bad ones?

A2. I think the bad choice that I made is to give up studying World history because it made my history score in the previous exam low.

Q3. Why did you choose to study English?

A3. I chose to study English because English was interesting when I learned it for the first time.
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