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Why do you think people commit crimes?

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It's because to earn money or reason which it can't avoid. But many case of crimes's reasons are to earn money or ridiculous reasons. Actually I don't know why people commit crimes because of what. They know it can catch out by police and they get punishment. I think they think they will not catch out if they run away well.

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Good evening Daisy. :)
I agree that most people commit crimes because of financial needs or reasons. 
They may have lost their jobs and need money to feed their family or to provide for their daily needs. 
Anyhow, I hope you're doing great. 
See you later. ^^
~Teacher Charry

It's because to earn money or reason which it can't avoid. 
>> Some people do it to earn money or do it because of unavoidable reasons. 
But many case of crimes's reasons are to earn money or ridiculous reasons. 
>> But in many cases of crimes, the reasons are to earn money or just because of other ridiculous reasons. 
Actually I don't know why people commit crimes because of what. 
>> Actually I don't know the specific reasons why people commit crimes. 
They know it can catch out by police and they get punishment. 
>> They know that they can get caught by the police and get a punishment for it. 
I think they think they will not catch out if they run away well.
>> In my opinion, they mush think that they will never get caught as long as they run well. 
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