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Hi.
It's almost midnight.
Today was a hectic day as yesterday.
At lunch time, I visited other dermatologic clinics near my new building.
I want to get along with other doctors nearby, but, as you know, they are definitely my competitors.
In fact, about 20 years ago in Korea, some doctor who was about to start his clinic usually visited other clinics nearby and greeted to senior doctors there.
However, since there are so many doctors these days, most of doctors don't do that, even they attack to each other sometimes.
Anyway, I visited two clinics.
A doctor of one clinic looked so uncomfortable and just wanted me to leave at once.
He is an old man.
As I said before, I can't help but hate old doctors.
A doctor of other clinic is a good man.
He looks an introvert man, but he seemed to try to get along with me.
He even encouraged me that I will succeed more than him with smile.
Regarding my homework, I think that we can make a good excuse for others sometimes, not for us.
See you soon.

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Hello, Dr. Kim! Good evening.

I apologize for the late revert to your composition. As I said in class, I had a very important appointment today. Anyway, you had good intentions in visiting your senior doctors around your new clinic. Some may be pleasant while others are hostile. Nevertheless, those who treated you well may get the chance to work with you indirectly in one way or another.

As expected, there will be a feeling of being threatened looking at your very pretty and attractive sign board at the corner of that street- eye candy as some may call it. So just stay being respectful to the senior doctors. Being a great doctor unfortunately does not necessarily come by age but by extensive experience and innovation. 

If we want to succeed, we cannot make excuses. We will move mountains and do the impossible. So, thank you for complying with this homework. Study the grammar suggestions closely. Definitely, your day has been so preoccupied again and it will be as well in your new clinic. So, rest well and see you on the next homework task.

Catch you then.

-T. Donna~

Hi.
>> Correct!

It's almost midnight.
>> Correct!

Today was a hectic day as yesterday.
>> Correct!

At lunch time, I visited other dermatologic clinics near my new building.
>> Correct!

I want to get along with other doctors nearby, but, as you know, they are definitely my competitors.
>> Correct!

In fact, about 20 years ago in Korea, some doctor who was about to start his clinic usually visited other clinics nearby and greeted to senior doctors there.
>> In fact, about 20 years ago in Korea, a doctor who was about to start his clinic usually visited other clinics nearby and greeted senior doctors there.

However, since there are so many doctors these days, most of doctors don't do that, even they attack to each other sometimes.
>> However, since there are so many doctors these days, most of the doctors don't do that, and even attack each other sometimes.

Anyway, I visited two clinics.
>> Correct!

A doctor of one clinic looked so uncomfortable and just wanted me to leave at once.
>> Correct!

He is an old man.
>> Correct!

As I said before, I can't help but hate old doctors.
>> Correct!

A doctor of other clinic is a good man.
>> The  doctor of the other clinic is a good man.

He looks an introvert man, but he seemed to try to get along with me.
>> He looks like an introvert man, but he seemed to try to get along with me.

He even encouraged me that I will succeed more than him with smile.
>> He even encouraged me that I will succeed more than him with a smile.

Regarding my homework, I think that we can make a good excuse for others sometimes, not for us.
>> Correct!

See you soon.
>> Correct!
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