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Tell me something that motivates you to become productive.

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2023-02-20 2065

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This month, I met a female leader online who works as a managing director for a large Korean company.
She was a mother of two and a very successful leader.
She said that she wakes up at dawn every day and does regular exercise, and while taking care of her two children, she is challenging her doctoral degree.
Even though she has already completed the MBA program at an American university.
She said that she plans her own day in 10-minute blocks.
It's something I'm not really confident about, but she talked about it as if it were very natural.
I really thought that through conversations with her, I were most inspired, and I want to be like her.Because she's so cool.
That's why I'm trying to study English hard, and I'm taking an additional accounting lecture.
I hope that if I keep working hard, I can become a better me than I am now.

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Hello Nan A! 
This was very nicely written! I loved reading your ideas and your were able to organize them well in writing. Keep up the good work! 
~~Teacher Kate 

This month, I met a female leader online who works as a managing director for a large Korean company.
>>CORRECT!
She was a mother of two and a very successful leader.
>>CORRECT!
She said that she wakes up at dawn every day and does regular exercise, and while taking care of her two children, she is challenging her doctoral degree.
>>CORRECT!
Even though she has already completed the MBA program at an American university.
>>CORRECT!
She said that she plans her own day in 10-minute blocks.
>>CORRECT!
It's something I'm not really confident about, but she talked about it as if it were very natural.
>>CORRECT!
I really thought that through conversations with her, I were most inspired, and I want to be like her. Because she's so cool.
>>I really thought that through conversations with her, I was most inspired, and I want to be like her because she's so cool.
That's why I'm trying to study English hard, and I'm taking an additional accounting lecture.
>>That's why I'm trying to study English hard, and I'm taking an additional accounting course.
I hope that if I keep working hard, I can become a better me than I am now.
>>CORRECT! (Teacher's Note: This is a very beautiful concluding sentence! )
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