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What do you think are the most important qualities a president should have?

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I think it is honest and accuracy. It's because many president always lie during the election, after win the election and they didn't keep pledge for various reasons. Especially many Korean presidents didn't keep their pledge during a second term rather then they just did bad things and behavior for their profit. So I am very angry of that. But sometime I think politicians are very smart so they want to get more profit and happiness from politics.

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Good evening Daisy. ^^
Thank you for diligently writing an essay about this matter. 
Presidents as leaders should be credible enough. I agree that they should be honest and accurate with their actions. 
Anyhow, I hope that your next president will be a good one if not better. 
See you again later. ^^
~Teacher Charry


I think it is honest and accuracy. 
>> I think they are honesty and accuracy. 
It's because many president always lie during the election, after win the election and they didn't keep pledge for various reasons. 
>> It's because many presidents always lie during the election. But after winning the election they don't keep their pledges for various reasons. 
Especially many Korean presidents didn't keep their pledge during a second term rather then they just did bad things and behavior for their profit. 
>> Many Korean presidents especially, didn't keep their pledges during their second term. Rather, they just did bad things and behaved poorly for their profit. 
So I am very angry of that. 
>> CORRECT!
But sometime I think politicians are very smart so they want to get more profit and happiness from politics.
>> But sometimes, I think politicians are very smart because they want to get more profit and happiness from politics.
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