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Touching my body for greeting annoys me. For example, someone dishevels my hair or slap my butt. He wants to express his gladness, but it makes me a bad feeling. I prefer waving hand to greet. If someone wants to greet skin by skin, I can accept up to hug.

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Hi, Robin.
Thank you for doing your homework. I agree with you. Disheveling one's hair or slapping one's butt is an annoying form of greeting even between close friends because sometimes, it doesn't show respect already. One may have spent a lot of time fixing his/her hair just to look good.
- T. Caitlyn
Touching my body for greeting annoys me. 
>> CORRECT
For example, someone dishevels my hair or slap my butt. 
>> For example, disheveling my hair or slapping my butt. 
He wants to express his gladness, but it makes me a bad feeling. 
>> I know he wants to express his gladness but it gives me a bad feeling.
I prefer waving hand to greet.
>> I prefer waving my hand to greet.
 If someone wants to greet skin by skin, I can accept up to hug.
>> If someone wants to greet me skin-to-skin, I can accept hugs only.
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