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Hi.
It's almost 11 PM here.
I was more exhausted than yesterday.
Today, I worked so hard as if I was a warrior.
There were many clients and patients in the clinic.
And, there were also many administrative works.
For a while, I imagined if I were two or three men.
I think that our clinic will be more famous for long waiting.
Meanwhile, there was a good thing.
One of my patients gave us several pizzas to express her gratitude for the treatment.
As you can guess, this kind of thing always makes me happier.
Actually, there were so many staff in the clinic, so those pizzas weren't enough for us, nevertheless, this event made all of us feel good.
This afternoon, Dr.Bae requested more information of treatment and Dr. MJ felt so bad about it.
After our clinic was closed, I called Dr. Bae and tried to explain how we feel about the request.
During the conversation, Dr. Bae and I could know mutual position and emotion.
As you know, I love a peace.
I hope we'll get along with each other.
See you.

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Hi there, Dr. Kim!

CONGRATULATIONS for getting all of the sentences here on your composition correctly! I have been waiting for this day to come true.You have done such a great job! Now, all we need to polish is your diction and syntax.

Anyway, I wonder how will you be able to solve the long queuesin your clinic. Since you cannot multiply yourself, you have to work faster. However, treatments really need time and accuracy. So, maybe this can be one of your points of discussion with Dr. MJ. For one, people actually have less patience being in a long line. Some of them leave. This needs to be addressed soon since clients who walk away means money down the drain.

I hope Dr. Bae will try to become a better person for the future of his clinic. 

Once again, I am very proud of your achievements not only in your clinic but more importantly, the amazing job you put into your English speech as well as writing. Have a wonderful weekend!

See you next week!

-T. Donna~

Hi.
>> Correct!

It's almost 11 PM here.
>> Correct!

I was more exhausted than yesterday.
>> Correct!

Today, I worked so hard as if I was a warrior.
>> Correct!

There were many clients and patients in the clinic.
>> Correct!

And, there were also many administrative works.
>> Correct!

For a while, I imagined if I were two or three men.
>> Correct!

I think that our clinic will be more famous for long waiting.
>> Correct!
Or: I think that our clinic will be more famous for  waiting long.

Meanwhile, there was a good thing.
>> Correct!

One of my patients gave us several pizzas to express her gratitude for the treatment.
>> Correct!

As you can guess, this kind of thing always makes me happier.
>> Correct!

Actually, there were so many staff in the clinic, so those pizzas weren't enough for us, nevertheless, this event made all of us feel good.
>> Correct!

This afternoon, Dr.Bae requested more information of treatment and Dr. MJ felt so bad about it.
>> Correct!

After our clinic was closed, I called Dr. Bae and tried to explain how we feel about the request.
>> Correct!

During the conversation, Dr. Bae and I could know mutual position and emotion.
>> Correct!

As you know, I love a peace.
>> Correct!

I hope we'll get along with each other.
>> Correct!

See you.
>> Correct!
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