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Hell.
How was your weekend?
As I told you, I went to the seminar on Saturday.
I could think new idea of my device through the seminar.
And last night, my college friend who is an urologist called me that she wanted to see me.
Thus, I called another friend, and three of us could meet.
She planned to travel many countries with her family around five years and for that, she wanted to sell her clinic to someone.
However, the old doctor who owned the building that she worked didn't want her to leave, so he disagreed the selling.
That old doctor has the building, but the clinic is not his.
Actually, he had some privileges for the clinic owing to my friend.
Meanwhile, she made enough money besides of her clinic.
She tried to succeed in many businesses, and finally she achieved the goal in the lodging business.
Today, I went to a big academy that Dr. MJ belongs to.
Regarding my homework, Dr. Bae tried to learn something in spite of his old age.
That is his good weapon, I guess.
See you.

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Hi there, Dr. Kim!

My weekend was magnificent and spectacular as discussed in class. Yours was very interesting since you had another busy day learning as well as meeting your colleagues. As doctors and business owners, owning properties are great investments. So, I hope that you were able to give enlightenment to your friend regarding business. Sometimes, taking risks and change can be so challenging for others. In time, your friend will be able to solve her problem.

Someday, I hope that you will not experience the uncertainties that she is experiencing right now. Well, let us wish her the best in her next journey just as how she wishes you well on yours. 

Looking positively about the traits of others in spite of our differences is the best way to maintain good relationships. If we do this, they will also consider our needs and help us in the future.

As you can see, the underlined words are my grammar suggestions. Kindly compare them to the structure of your sentence and analyze their patterns.

Hence, see you again on Thursday! Have a great afternoon!

-T. Donna~

Hell.
>> Hello.

How was your weekend?
>> Correct!

As I told you, I went to the seminar on Saturday.
>> Correct!

I could think new idea of my device through the seminar.
>> I could think of a new idea with my device through the seminar.

And last night, my college friend who is an urologist called me that she wanted to see me.
>> Correct!

Thus, I called another friend, and three of us could meet.
>> Thus, I called another friend, and the three of us could meet.

She planned to travel many countries with her family around five years and for that, she wanted to sell her clinic to someone.
>> Correct!

However, the old doctor who owned the building that she worked didn't want her to leave, so he disagreed the selling.
>> However, the old doctor who owned the building that she worked in didn't want her to leave, so he disagreed on selling it.

That old doctor has the building, but the clinic is not his.
>> Correct!

Actually, he had some privileges for the clinic owing to my friend.
>> Correct!

Meanwhile, she made enough money besides of her clinic.
>> Correct!

She tried to succeed in many businesses, and finally she achieved the goal in the lodging business.
>> Correct!

Today, I went to a big academy that Dr. MJ belongs to.
>> Correct!

Regarding my homework, Dr. Bae tried to learn something in spite of his old age.
>> Correct!

That is his good weapon, I guess.
>> Correct!

See you.
>> Correct!
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