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1) According to change the Korean society, people do not think no longer meaning of neighbor these days. In other words, Neighbor is not existence of friendship currently. I've watched an article that people murdered their neighbor. because of noise between apartments.

2) I see a puppy that runs on the yard.

3) I know gossip about pretty girl in my school that actually, she was a man 2years ago.

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Great job, Emma! This was a well-put-together homework! However, there were some things we need to change and some words are a bit misplaced, so here are my corrections:

1st: If 'Change the Korean Society' is a news station or newspaper company, you must use capital letters for each word except for 'the'. 'Do not' and 'no longer' means the same, so choose only one of them. 

2nd: 'Existence' is a noun and 'exist' is a verb. 'Friendship' must be the subject so you must use the pattern 'Friendship exists...' or 'Friendship does not exist...'

3rd: 'Articles' are read and 'reports' are watched. Also, remember to use 'the' to emphasize a 'specific noise'.

5th: In this sentence, you are only talking about one gossip and one pretty girl, so remember to use 'a' for both of them. You've already mentioned 'a pretty girl in my school', so there's no need to address her as 'she'. Use 'a pretty girl in my school' as the subject and 'was actually a man' as a verb phrase.

Great job, Emma. Keep up the hard work! 

- Teacher Raven 


According to change the Korean society, people do not think no longer meaning of neighbor these days.
>> According to Change the Korean Society, people no longer think about their neighbors these days.

In other words, Neighbor is not existence of friendship currently.
>> In other words, friendship does not exist between neighbors.

I've watched an article that people murdered their neighbor. because of noise between apartments.
>> I've watched a report that people murdered their neighbor because of the noise between apartments.

I see a puppy that runs on the yard.
>> Correct.

I know gossip about pretty girl in my school that actually, she was a man 2years ago.
>> I know a gossip about a pretty girl in my school that was actually a man 2 years ago.
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