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Is anger ever a good thing? If so, when? Why?

작성자: 장*은
2023-03-15 1943

회원님의 영작문

Sometimes anger can be a good thing.
For example, if I get in an unreasonable trouble with a stranger, it would be better that I get anger to another person smartly.
I regret the past myself. I had a part time job in the market before I got a real job.
The average of the age of work men is 3-40 years old, so many customer treat me a student or a young girl.
Some customers shout out to me, spit me swear words, or intimidate me. Maybe they thought that they could treat me rudely, because I am a girl and a young person.
I should become anger when they treated me like that but I didn't because I was really afraid they will hit me..
But now I think if I got an anger to them, they might be politely. So I think sometimes anger can be a good thing.
If the mood flows strangely enough, everyone has to become anger to the rude people.

강사님의 첨삭교정 내용

Hello Gem!
I'm sorry you had to experience that. I would have been angry too. Anyways, thank you always for your effort in writing. I'll see you tomorrow! ^^
~~Teacher Kate 

Sometimes anger can be a good thing.
>>CORRECT!
For example, if I get in an unreasonable trouble with a stranger, it would be better that I get anger to another person smartly.
>>For example, if I get into an unreasonable trouble with a stranger, it would be better to get angry with that person smartly. 
I regret the past myself. 
>>I regret my past self. 
I had a part time job in the market before I got a real job.
>>CORRECT!
The average of the age of work men is 3-40 years old, so many customer treat me a student or a young girl.
>>The average age of men working there is 30 to 40 years old, so many customers treat me as a student or a young girl. 
Some customers shout out to me, spit me swear words, or intimidate me. 
>>Some customers shouted at me, spit me swear words, or intimidated me. 
Maybe they thought that they could treat me rudely, because I am a girl and a young person.
>>CORRECT!
I should become anger when they treated me like that but I didn't because I was really afraid they will hit me.
>>I should've become angry when they treated me like that but I didn't because I was really afraid they would hit me.
But now I think if I got an anger to them, they might be politely. 
>>But now, I think that if I got angry at them, they would have been more polite.  
So I think sometimes anger can be a good thing.
>>CORRECT!
If the mood flows strangely enough, everyone has to become anger to the rude people.
>>If the mood is strange enough, everyone has to be angry at rude people.
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