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my family is 6 person.
when I lived in my house with six person.
I shared the room with my younger sister. that is so unlucky thing!
Because she and my mother had a lot of fight, that make me some tired.
and when I was 17 years old, we're moved it more better place.
and I had only my room, that time's make me happy.
Because anybody don't touch me, and I had some relax.

so I think, the best gift is bring my own space.

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Hi Da Hye,

Even the most outgoing and social people require a quiet spot. Your bedroom ought to be a haven of peace where you can curl up with a good book, unplug and watch TV, or simply relax away from the world. It's important to have alone time. By having the space designed how you desire, you can achieve greater motivation and a positive influence on your work and home life.

~Teacher Cathy

 

my family is 6 person.

>> There are six people in my family.

when I lived in my house with six person.

>> And I lived in my house with six people.

I shared the room with my younger sister.

>> I shared a room with my younger sister.

that is so unlucky thing!

>> That is so unfortunate!

Because she and my mother had a lot of fight, that make me some tired.

>> Because she and my mother fight a lot, and it's making me tired.

and when I was 17 years old, we're moved it more better place.

>> But when I was 17, we moved to a better place.

and I had only my room, that time's make me happy.

>>I had my room to myself, which made me happy.

Because anybody don't touch me, and I had some relax.

>> Because nobody can disturb me and I have time to relax.

so I think, the best gift is bring my own space.

>>So I believe the best gift is to have my own space.

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