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Are you impressed by the current advancements in the medical field? Or do you think they could do be

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2023-03-20 1720

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I was impressed with cancer treatment's current advancements in the medical field. In fact, billions of people have suffered cancer in recent years. Even though there are a lot of people who have a hard time because of cancer, we could see that patients are decreasing compared to the last few years. Here is the evidence. According to the Cancer Center, "more than 80% of people diagnosed with cancer types which are easier to diagnose and/or treat survive"(Cancer Center, 2022). People are usually afraid to get cancer because they believe cancer is the cruelest and most fatal disease in the world. But that rate makes people feel much more comfortable with cancer, in addition, it shows cancer treatment has developed a lot. But whether cancer treatment develops, it should be developed more than now. Because there is still some cancer that is hard to fully recover from. Especially, only 12.8% of people can recover from brain cancer. Better quality of medical treatment can make better society

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Great choice of topic, Su A!  I also wanted to hear from you about cancer since it is quite controversial. Some people have even theorized that perhaps the medical field is purposefully hiding treatments for cancer to prevent hospitals from losing profit.  I haven't heard about the report from Cancer Center, so it was a nice piece of information to add there. Your readers would have gained new knowledge from reading your essay.  You also ended it on a realistic note, that while cancer has taken a lot of steps forward for the better, it doesn't promise us complete recovery just yet. Thank you! 
~T.Harmony <3

I was impressed with cancer treatment's current advancements in the medical field.
>> CORRECT!
In fact, billions of people have suffered cancer in recent years. 
>> ...billions of people have suffered from cancer...
Even though there are a lot of people who have a hard time because of cancer, we could see that patients are decreasing compared to the last few years. 
>> CORRECT!
Here is the evidence. 
>> CORRECT!
According to the Cancer Center, "more than 80% of people diagnosed with cancer types which are easier to diagnose and/or treat survive"(Cancer Center, 2022). 
>> CORRECT!
People are usually afraid to get cancer because they believe cancer is the cruelest and most fatal disease in the world. 
>> CORRECT!
OR>> People often fear being diagnosed of cancer because they think of it as incurable and highly fatal.
But that rate makes people feel much more comfortable with cancer, in addition, it shows cancer treatment has developed a lot. 
>> However, the percentage reported by Cancer Center in 2022 makes people feel much more at ease with cancer. In addition, it shows cancer treatment has developed a lot. 
But whether cancer treatment develops, it should be developed more than now. 
>> CORRECT!
Because there is still some cancer that is hard to fully recover from. 
>> ...still some types of cancer...
Especially, only 12.8% of people can recover from brain cancer. 
>> In particular, ...
Better quality of medical treatment can make better society
>> ...can make a better society.
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