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Yes I have. It is eating late at night. I know eating late at night is bad for my health. But eating while watching Netflix is a happy thing. For my health, Now I¡¯m trying to reduce it.

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Good day, Grace! I appreciate your time and effort in writing your sentences. Also, in your composition, you share about some of your habits especially the things you enjoy doing. Keep up the good work in writing. Enjoy your day! ~T .Lyn
Yes I have. 
>>Yes, I do.
It is eating late at night. 
>>I like eating late at night.
I know eating late at night is bad for my health. 
>>Correct.
But eating while watching Netflix is a happy thing. 
>>For me, eating while watching movies on Netflix makes me happy.
For my health, Now I¡¯m trying to reduce it.
>>I'm trying to cut this down for my health.
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