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I think that kids is not good for influencer by social media.
Because the social media have a lot of thoughtless information. Kids is lack of ability to right and wrong. Their brain is training to critical power.
So if they influence by social media, they might learn bad thought.
It is good to protect their free, but it is more important to protect their kind think.

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Thank you for your homework, Ye Lim!

You're doing good! Keep it up!

-Hanna ^^

I think that kids is not good for influencer by social media.

>>I think that it is not good to make kids as social media influencers.
Because the social media have a lot of thoughtless information.

>>Because social media gives a lot of thoughtless information.

 Kids is lack of ability to right and wrong. 

>>Kids don't have the ability to know what is right or wrong.

Their brain is training to critical power.

>>They still need to be trained and taught carefully.
So if they influence by social media, they might learn bad thought.

>>So if they will be social media influencers, they might learn how to do bad things.
It is good to protect their free, but it is more important to protect their kind think.

>>It is good to give them freedom, but it is more important to protect their well-being.

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