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When I was imagine it. It's romantic. I love it.
But I worry about natural disaster.
Beside, maybe if i look at the beach every day, I feel bored.

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Hello there, Sae Bom! 

For me, the beach is the place to be. It is very calm, peaceful and relaxing. It helps me to unwind and takes away the stress that plagues me at work. When I'm at the beach, I can tune out, clear my head, and often find creative solutions to challenges or inspiration for new ideas. In fact, the repetitive sound and sight of waves promote a meditative state. That's why when I'm at the beach, I feel unburdened, lighter, and this positively affects my mood.

- Kristine ^^ 


When I was imagine it. It's romantic. 
>> I think living in a house on the beach sounds romantic.
I love it.
>> I would probably love it. 
But I worry about natural disaster.
>> However, I'm concerned about natural catastrophe.
Beside, maybe if i look at the beach every day, I feel bored.
>> In addition, I might get bored if I stare at the beach every day.
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