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I think that one thing I achieve the goal.
This is I entered the university.
When I was high school, all the student goal was going to good university. So they study hard.
But nowadays my goal is earn money, and travel around the world.
And also learn coffee. There are many things I want to do. So I want to achieve it one by one.

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Thank you for your homework, Ye Lim!

Practice will always make progress. Keep going!

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I think that one thing I achieve the goal.

>>I think the think that I have achieved is my goal.
This is I entered the university.

>>It is when I entered my university.
When I was high school, all the student goal was going to good university. 

>>When I was in high school, every student's goal was to go to a good university.

So they study hard.

>>Correct.

But nowadays my goal is earn money, and travel around the world.

>>But nowadays, my goal is to earn money and travel around the world.
And also learn coffee. 

>>And also get to know about coffee.

There are many things I want to do. 

>>Correct.

OR: There are a lot of things that I want to do.

So I want to achieve it one by one.

>>Correct.

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