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While not directly related to the main point of the article, do you think a diverse population is go

작성자: 이*아
2023-04-09 1759

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"Diversity is about all of us, and about us having to figure out how to walk through this world together"(Jacqueline Woodson). Of course, having a diverse population is good for the development of our country with different aspects of society. Our world has developed and grown with various radical, ethnic, and cultural backgrounds. In other words, our society without a connection between us and others will not make the better society and society that we want to make. But sometimes there are some problems or challenges because of different perspectives of people. That means if there is a problem between Asian and American, both of them will understand in different ways because of their belief and cultural background. However, our society must need others' perspectives because sometimes their opinions make a better choice. So, we cannot say which perspectives are better but we could make a better choice if our country with a diverse population.

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You tackled the topic well, Su A! I commend you for placing the relevant quote at the beginning of your essay, and you chose a perfect one to introduce the main content of your composition.  I can see that you are open to the idea of having a diverse population despite the possible setbacks (e.g. disagreements due to certain beliefs and cultural background), and you were able to encourage your readers to feel the same way. 
~T.Harmony <3

"Diversity is about all of us, and about us having to figure out how to walk through this world together"(Jacqueline Woodson). 
>> CORRECT!
Of course, having a diverse population is good for the development of our country with different aspects of society. 
>> CORRECT!
Our world has developed and grown with various radical, ethnic, and cultural backgrounds. 
>> CORRECT!
In other words, our society without a connection between us and others will not make the better society and society that we want to make.
>> ...and others will not make our society better, and turn it into the kind of society we want.
But sometimes there are some problems or challenges because of different perspectives of people. 
>> CORRECT!
That means if there is a problem between Asian and American, both of them will understand in different ways because of their belief and cultural background. 
>> ...problem between an Asian and an American...
However, our society must need others' perspectives because sometimes their opinions make a better choice. 
>> CORRECT!
So, we cannot say which perspectives are better but we could make a better choice if our country with a diverse population.
>> ...if our country has a diverse population.
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