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Homework

작성자: 김*우
2023-04-11 1742

회원님의 영작문

Hi.
Since it is dark and rainy outside, there are only few patients in the clinic.
However, there is no need to concern.
We can get more profits other days.
I actually drank some whiskey with a pork dish "jok-bal" last night.
After I was drunken a little, I called many friends.
A friend who is also doctor was in a depressed mood.
As I mentioned before, many korean doctors are not satisfied with their works and lives.
And my laywer friend told me that he had a hard time with money problem.
Thus, I decided to lend some money to him.
My wife listened to the conversation at that time.
As I am writing this composition, I wondered if my wife felt bad about it, so I texted to her.
In a minute, I got a message from her.
She replied she supported my decision.
There are many weird clients everyday.
They act weird when they feel discomfort, pain or fear.
Sometimes they do it because they wanted to save money.
However, the most precise factor is that they are not usual people basically.
See you.

강사님의 첨삭교정 내용

Good afternoon!

I also heard from my other students that South Korea is colder and windy today. Keep safe and warm.  Profit is one measure of how much good you are doing. The more needs you meet, the more successful you will be. Dr. MJ was right after all. These days are fine because you have saved enough for the rainy days (or windy days too).

Lending money can damage relationships with your friend and family, especially if they might have trouble paying it back. On the contrary, it can be a gesture of goodwill when someone you know is in a tight spot financially. We canot deny the importance of money in everyone's life. You were too kind to lend your friend money. Your wife is so supportive as well to tell you that she trusts your decision. After all, your friends are trustworthy so, you can manage.

Patients may act paranoid, lash out in anger, or simply seem quite silly during a procedure because this process is alien to them. The best approach is to be patient and develop a rapport with them. Defuse thje violent situation, remain calm, listen to what they are saying, ask open-ended questions, and finally eeassure them and acknowledge that what they feel is natural. Of course, this is better said than done.

I am certain that there will be patients this afernoon. So, thank you for submitting your homework early. Go over my suggestions and make sure not to commit the same mistakes on the next submission. 

Have a great afternoon, Dr. Kim!

-T. Donna~

Hi.
>> Correct!

Since it is dark and rainy outside, there are only few patients in the clinic.
>> Since it is dark and rainy outside, there are only a few patients in the clinic.

However, there is no need to concern.
>>  However, there is no need for concern.

We can get more profits other days.
>> We can get more profits the other days.

I actually drank some whiskey with a pork dish "jok-bal" last night.
>> Correct!

After I was drunken a little, I called many friends.
>> After I was drunk a little, I called many friends.

A friend who is also doctor was in a depressed mood.
>> Correct!

As I mentioned before, many korean doctors are not satisfied with their works and lives.
>> Correct!

And my laywer friend told me that he had a hard time with money problem.
>> And my laywer friend told me that he had a hard time with a money problem.

Thus, I decided to lend some money to him.
>> Correct!

My wife listened to the conversation at that time.
>> Correct!

As I am writing this composition, I wondered if my wife felt bad about it, so I texted to her.
>> As I am writing this composition, I wondered if my wife felt bad about it, so I texted her.

In a minute, I got a message from her.
>> Correct!

She replied she supported my decision.
>> Correct!

There are many weird clients everyday.
>> Correct!

They act weird when they feel discomfort, pain or fear.
>> Correct!

Sometimes they do it because they wanted to save money.
>> Correct!

However, the most precise factor is that they are not usual people basically.
>> Correct!

See you.
>> Correct!
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