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2023-04-16 1996

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Learning etiquette from elderly is advantage of extended family. Family is one of the societies. We can learn consideration and concession. But sometimes, there¡¯s no alone time. Family members can interfere in my life anytime. Therefore, it can be disadvantage of extended family.

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Happy Monday, Robin.
I agree. It is nice to learn a thing or two from elderlies but at the same time, they can, at some point, take control of your life and you can have little to no privacy when living with them.
-T. Caitlin
Learning etiquette from elderly is advantage of extended family. 
>> Learning etiquette from the elderly is an advantage of extended family. 
Family is one of the societies. 
>> CORRECT.
We can learn consideration and concession. 
>> CORRECT.
But sometimes, there¡¯s no alone time. 
>> CORRECT.
Family members can interfere in my life anytime. 
>> CORRECT.
Therefore, it can be disadvantage of extended family.
>> Therefore, it can be a disadvantage when living with extended family.
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