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I think the electric bus is the most environmentally friendly transportation. Firstly, as many people know, electric vehicles don't emit the gas which comes from the fossil fuel vehicles. The gas ruin the ozone layer of the Earth, so ultraviolet light can come to the Earth. In addition, the bus is huge transportation, so it can save the energy by carrying a lot of people. I hope to increase electric vehicles worldwide for healthy Earth.

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Hi, Robin.
Thank you for doing your homework. I agree when it comes to electric vehicles, they are eco-friendly and cause less pollution. For me, I think bicycles are also one of the most eco-friendly transportation but the problem is when it comes to distance.
-T. Caitlyn
I think the electric bus is the most environmentally friendly transportation. 
>> CORRECT
Firstly, as many people know, electric vehicles don't emit the gas which comes from the fossil fuel vehicles. 
>> First, as many people know, electric vehicles don't emit the same gases coming from fossil fuel vehicles. 
The gas ruin the ozone layer of the Earth, so ultraviolet light can come to the Earth. 
>> These gases destroy the Earth's ozone layer, allowing harmful ultraviolet light to reach the Earth.
In addition, the bus is huge transportation, so it can save the energy by carrying a lot of people. 
>> In addition, the bus is huge transportation, so it can save energy by carrying a lot of people. 
I hope to increase electric vehicles worldwide for healthy Earth.
>> I hope electric vehicles will increase worldwide for a healthier Earth.
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