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No, becasue I think 'I didn't do good to my friend. I will do more good if I make more friends.'if I lose my friend.
I have a lot of friends, but they all are similar that they are the kind friends. And my friends said that I'm kind so my friends are similar to me that they and I'm kind.

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Hi Soeun!
Thank you for trying to express your thoughts.
We just need to arrange your words very well.
You also need to choose the right terms.
Let's practice again next week.^^
~~ Teacher Sharon
No, becasue I think 'I didn't do good to my friend. 
>> No, because I think I haven't been a good friend. 
I will do more good if I make more friends.'if I lose my friend.
>> I think I will be better if I lose a friend.
I have a lot of friends, but they all are similar that they are the kind friends. 
>> I have a lot of friends but they are all similar.
And my friends said that I'm kind so my friends are similar to me that they and I'm kind.
>> My friends told me that I'm kind and they are the same. 
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