무료 레벨테스트 받고 강사평가 남기면 1,OOO원 쿠폰 즉시 적립!

혹시 사이트에선 찾지 못한 궁금한 점이 있으세요?
남겨주신 이메일을 통해 답변 드리겠습니다.

문의하신 내용이 문자로 발송되오니
연락처를 남겨주세요.
업무시간 월~금 오전9시~오후6시
(점심시간 낮12시~오후1시)

영작교정 게시판

영어 말하기와 쓰기를 동시에 잡는다!

자신 있게 쓸 수 있는 영작문을 위해 파워잉글리쉬 수업을 수강하시는
회원님들께 무료로 제공해드리는 부가 서비스로, 전문 분야를 제외한 자유 주제
또는 강사님이 내주시는 과제를 회원님께서 영어로 작성해주시면,
담당 강사 님께서 ‘문법 오류 교정’ 과 ‘더 나은 영어식 표현’으로 교정해주는
서비스 입니다.

Homework

작성자: 김*우
2023-05-07 1414

회원님의 영작문

Hello. T.Donna.
May is the family month in Korea.
There are Children's day and Parents day on May.
To celebrate these special days, we have a family gathering yesterday.
My parents and my brother's family came to my new house.
They also took around our new clinic.
They gave me some money to celebrate our new beginnings.
We ate some delicious chinese foods last evening, of course I drank wiskey, so now I have a hangover.
My brother looked so slim, because he succeeded his diet to prevent a progress of diabetes.
Last night, I received two calls from my college friends.
They are suffering from the bad relationship with their wives.
One of them ended up deciding to get divorce.
They have a same situation; their wives always focus on kid's education and have a lot of stress of it, and consequently, they are always depressed.
I hope their relationships get restored.
As for my assignment, there is no problem about our communication of my family, if there is no anger.
See you.

강사님의 첨삭교정 내용

Hi, Dr. Kim!

Happy Parent's Day to you and your wife once again. Without the gift pf being a father or a mother, this would never be possible. Even if you need to work today, your efforts are not in vain because you have your children who motivate you to do well in your profession. In general, families are important to society because they are the foundation of a civilization, social relationships, and the values of a population. Family is a bond that lasts forever. Cheers to your big happy family! Spending time with them is priceless.

I guess your brother's case is one of the reasons why you are regulating your blood sugar count all the time. There is no doubt that maintaining the right body weight makes us healthier and more fit. Then, making a habit to be physically active and keeping a regular diet is a must. However, in celebrations when food is involved, this can be tough to achieve.

We can oly hope for the best for your friends in their decisions for divorce. Support them in whichever makes then happier in life. 

Anger is best avoided when we have open ears, eyes, mind, and heart to accept that our family members including us are not perfect human beings. 

Thank you for accomplishing your homework. You expressed how adorable your family is in a direct and grammatically correct manner. Keep writing!

See you son. 

-T. Donna~

Hello. T.Donna.
>> Correct!

May is the family month in Korea.
>> Correct!
Or: May is the Family Month in Korea.

There are Children's day and Parents day on May.
>> There are Children's Day and Parent's Day in May.

To celebrate these special days, we have a family gathering yesterday.
>> To celebrate these special days, we had a family gathering yesterday.

My parents and my brother's family came to my new house.
>> Correct!

They also took around our new clinic.
>> They also looked around our new clinic.

They gave me some money to celebrate our new beginnings.
>> Correct!

We ate some delicious chinese foods last evening, of course I drank wiskey, so now I have a hangover.
>> Correct!
Or:  We ate some delicious Chinese foods last evening, of course I drank wiskey, so now I have a hangover. Very good sentence!
 
My brother looked so slim, because he succeeded his diet to prevent a progress of diabetes.
>> My brother looked so slim, because he succeeded his diet to prevent the progress of diabetes.

Last night, I received two calls from my college friends.
>> Correct!

They are suffering from the bad relationship with their wives.
>> Correct!
Or: They are suffering from bad relationships with their wives.

One of them ended up deciding to get divorce.
>> Correct!

They have a same situation; their wives always focus on kid's education and have a lot of stress of it, and consequently, they are always depressed.
>> They have the same situation; their wives always focus on kid's education and have a lot of stress from it, and consequently, they are always depressed.

I hope their relationships get restored.
>> Correct!

As for my assignment, there is no problem about our communication of my family, if there is no anger.
>> As for my assignment, there is no problem about my communication with my family if there is no anger.

See you.
>> Correct!
번호 제목 글쓴이 공개 상태 등록일 조회수
127697 Do you prefer travelling though the countryside or the city? Why? 신*섭 완료 2023-04-22 2173
127696 Homework 박*민 완료 2023-04-22 2
127695 Homework 송*우 완료 2023-04-21 1639
127694 4.21 homework 권*림 완료 2023-04-21 1283
127693 Homework 박*은 완료 2023-04-21 0
127692 When I ate too much and ate too little. 김*윤 완료 2023-04-21 1412
127691 homework 박*경 완료 2023-04-21 1332
127690 homework 박*경 완료 2023-04-21 1735
127689 homework 신*현 완료 2023-04-21 1
127688 homework 04.21 최*� 완료 2023-04-21 1315
127687 What kind of people do you think would livestream their suicide?... 김*민 완료 2023-04-21 5
127686 If you could live in another place, where would you want to and... 앨* 완료 2023-04-21 0
127685 Does your country have a good public transport system? 신*섭 완료 2023-04-21 2163
127684 Do you think it\'s necessary to have a goal? Why? 전*영 완료 2023-04-21 1907
127683 Homework 함*주 완료 2023-04-21 1
127682 How will you assist a customer who is complaining about bad... 천*란 완료 2023-04-21 0
127681 Homework 권*미 완료 2023-04-21 1
127680 조*희 완료 2023-04-21 1834
127679 Is it important for citizens to voice their opinions and... 권*진 완료 2023-04-21 3
127678 Questions! 김*윤 완료 2023-04-21 1801

HOW TO USE IT?

[마이페이지 > 수업 내용 보기 > 학습 캘린더 > 영작교정 버튼 클릭]

수업 횟수만큼 영작교정 게시판이 생성되며,
지난 날짜에도 게시 할 수 있습니다.

주5회 수업 : 월 20회 이용 가능
주3회 수업 : 월 12회 이용 가능
주2회 수업 : 월 08회 이용 가능
01
교정 내용은 최대 1,000byte까지 올릴 수 있습니다.

첨부 파일은 원활한 첨삭을 위한 참고자료로 사용될 뿐,
파일에 대한 첨삭은 불가능 합니다.

업로드 가능한 첨부 파일은 최대 2mb까지이며,
첨부 할 수 있는 파일 형식은 다음과 같습니다.

문서 - PDF, TXT, DOCX,
이미지 - JPEG, PNG, GIF
02
전문 분야를 제외한 회원님이 직접 작성한 글만
첨삭이 가능하며,

올려주신 글의 강사님 첨삭은 24시간 이내에
완료 되는 것을 원칙으로 하고 있습니다.
03
하루 게시 가능한 글은 3회까지 이며,
종료된 수업의 영작교정 게시판은
이용이 어려운 점 양해 부탁 드립니다.
04