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I usually wake up at 6 o'clock, have an English class with Instructor Aki, stretch or exercise lightly, wash up, and get ready for computer academy.
I wake my daughter up around 7:30, tie her hair up, and go to computer academy.
I come home around 2 o'clock, have lunch, take a break, and take care of my daughter's early dinner after school.
Wednesday picks up her second daughter from art academy and Friday picks up her first daughter from school to drum music academy.
While the children are at the academy, I do my English homework or sew doll clothes at the cafe. On the other days of the week, I do my English homework and computer studies until my husband leaves work.
I eat dinner with my husband, watch TV together, and at 7 o'clock he goes to Zumba Center and I do housework such as washing the dishes.
Then at 8:00, I do Zumba and stretch, take a shower, play with the dog and cat, and when my husband comes back, we relax together and go to bed around 12:00.

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Good morning, Eliana!
You have a busy schedule every day but it looks like you are having fun. Thanks for sharing your daily routine and please check the corrections that I made here. Have a great weekend!
Aki~

I usually wake up at 6 o'clock, have an English class with Instructor Aki, stretch or exercise lightly, wash up, and get ready for computer academy.
>> CORRECT!

I wake my daughter up around 7:30, tie her hair up, and go to computer academy.
>>>  I wake my daughter up around 7:30, tie her hair up, and go to the computer academy.

I come home around 2 o'clock, have lunch, take a break, and take care of my daughter's early dinner after school.
>> CORRECT!

Wednesday picks up her second daughter from art academy and Friday picks up her first daughter from school to drum music academy.
>>>  On Wednesdays, I pick up my second daughter from the art academy, and Fridays,  I bring my first daughter from school to the drum music academy.

While the children are at the academy, I do my English homework or sew doll clothes at the cafe. 
>> CORRECT!

On the other days of the week, I do my English homework and computer studies until my husband leaves work.
>>>  On the other days of the week, I do my English homework and computer studies until my husband leaves for work.

I eat dinner with my husband, watch TV together, and at 7 o'clock he goes to Zumba Center and I do housework such as washing the dishes.
>> CORRECT!

Then at 8:00, I do Zumba and stretch, take a shower, play with the dog and cat, and when my husband comes back, we relax together and go to bed around 12:00.
>> CORRECT!
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