무료 레벨테스트 받고 강사평가 남기면 1,OOO원 쿠폰 즉시 적립!

혹시 사이트에선 찾지 못한 궁금한 점이 있으세요?
남겨주신 이메일을 통해 답변 드리겠습니다.

문의하신 내용이 문자로 발송되오니
연락처를 남겨주세요.
업무시간 월~금 오전9시~오후6시
(점심시간 낮12시~오후1시)

영작교정 게시판

영어 말하기와 쓰기를 동시에 잡는다!

자신 있게 쓸 수 있는 영작문을 위해 파워잉글리쉬 수업을 수강하시는
회원님들께 무료로 제공해드리는 부가 서비스로, 전문 분야를 제외한 자유 주제
또는 강사님이 내주시는 과제를 회원님께서 영어로 작성해주시면,
담당 강사 님께서 ‘문법 오류 교정’ 과 ‘더 나은 영어식 표현’으로 교정해주는
서비스 입니다.

What are the advantages and disadvantages of the popularity of Korean culture?

작성자: 이*은
2023-05-25 1775

회원님의 영작문

When it comes to nation power about relation with other countries, as Korean culture gets more famous, the soft power is increasingly effective. People in many other countries can easily access to Korea with feeling familiarity, and the possibility of acceptance also will be great. For this reason, the tourism can be invigorated. As a result, it can help development of economy.
However, there are several disadvantages of the popularity of K-culture. The main problem is that China claim that our traditional cultures or foods like hanbok, kimchi and samgeatang belong to them. They speak plainly Korean cultures are originated from Chinese history even through the official media. So, it has dangerous that many people could believe it's true. Consequently, they can gain distorted acknowledge. Therefore, I think it is also important to know not just about how much popularity it has but also how it is spread rightly.

강사님의 첨삭교정 내용

Happy Friday, Ko Eun.
You are right! K-culture's popularity can help in terms of promoting Korean culture which helps make other countries accept them easily and leads to growth of the Korean economy. However, I can also agree with the disadvantages that you've mentioned. It can cause envy from other countries and can start claims about certain things.
-T. Caitlyn
When it comes to nation power about relation with other countries, as Korean culture gets more famous, the soft power is increasingly effective. 
>> When it comes to national power in relation to other countries, as Korean culture gets more famous, the soft power is increasingly effective.
People in many other countries can easily access to Korea with feeling familiarity, and the possibility of acceptance also will be great.
>> People in many other countries can easily access Korea with a feeling of familiarity, and the possibility of acceptance will also be great.
For this reason, the tourism can be invigorated. 
>> For this reason, tourism can be invigorated.
As a result, it can help development of economy.
>> As a result, it can help the development of the economy.
However, there are several disadvantages of the popularity of K-culture. 
>> However, there are several disadvantages to the popularity of K-culture.
The main problem is that China claim that our traditional cultures or foods like hanbok, kimchi and samgeatang belong to them. 
>> The main problem is that China claims that our traditional cultures or foods like hanbok, kimchi, and samgyetang belong to them.
They speak plainly Korean cultures are originated from Chinese history even through the official media. 
>> They plainly state that Korean culture originated from Chinese history, even through official media.
So, it has dangerous that many people could believe it's true. 
>> So, it is dangerous because many people might believe it's true.
Consequently, they can gain distorted acknowledge. 
>> Consequently, they can gain distorted knowledge.
Therefore, I think it is also important to know not just about how much popularity it has but also how it is spread rightly.
>> CORRECT
번호 제목 글쓴이 공개 상태 등록일 조회수
130658 HOMEWORK: Please write a short paragraph about \"My most... 앨* 완료 2023-08-31 1
130657 Homework 김*서 완료 2023-08-31 2
130656 Homework 류*우 완료 2023-08-31 3575
130655 What are the important things to bring on a trip? 김*연 완료 2023-08-31 6
130654 What does stress do to our body? 정*화 완료 2023-08-31 2900
130653 Do you think punishments should be strict or people should be... 복*훈 완료 2023-08-31 4
130652 Homework 김* 완료 2023-08-31 0
130651 What did you like to do when you were a child? 김*연 완료 2023-08-31 4
130650 WRITING TASK: When do you treat your friends? 임*지 완료 2023-08-31 4
130649 Homework JA*UNG CHUNG 완료 2023-08-31 1830
130648 Do you prefer traveling alone or traveling with family and... 김*연 완료 2023-08-31 2
130647 A mobile phone 김*아 완료 2023-08-31 2
130646 How do you feel about not taking a risk at all? 이*태 완료 2023-08-31 2830
130645 How do you feel about advising your friends? 이*태 완료 2023-08-31 2103
130644 Do you think bullies still have the chance to change? Why or why... 김*경 완료 2023-08-31 2292
130643 What are the best ways to keep yourself fit? 김*경 완료 2023-08-31 2458
130642 Do we have a special responsibility to help others even though... 이*태 완료 2023-08-31 3056
130641 What are the pros and cons of keeping a pet? 조*민 완료 2023-08-31 2088
130640 Homework 김*님 완료 2023-08-30 1620
130639 What do you think are the biggest challenges facing transgenders... 김*민 완료 2023-08-30 3

HOW TO USE IT?

[마이페이지 > 수업 내용 보기 > 학습 캘린더 > 영작교정 버튼 클릭]

수업 횟수만큼 영작교정 게시판이 생성되며,
지난 날짜에도 게시 할 수 있습니다.

주5회 수업 : 월 20회 이용 가능
주3회 수업 : 월 12회 이용 가능
주2회 수업 : 월 08회 이용 가능
01
교정 내용은 최대 1,000byte까지 올릴 수 있습니다.

첨부 파일은 원활한 첨삭을 위한 참고자료로 사용될 뿐,
파일에 대한 첨삭은 불가능 합니다.

업로드 가능한 첨부 파일은 최대 2mb까지이며,
첨부 할 수 있는 파일 형식은 다음과 같습니다.

문서 - PDF, TXT, DOCX,
이미지 - JPEG, PNG, GIF
02
전문 분야를 제외한 회원님이 직접 작성한 글만
첨삭이 가능하며,

올려주신 글의 강사님 첨삭은 24시간 이내에
완료 되는 것을 원칙으로 하고 있습니다.
03
하루 게시 가능한 글은 3회까지 이며,
종료된 수업의 영작교정 게시판은
이용이 어려운 점 양해 부탁 드립니다.
04

와이즈에듀케이션아이(주) 사이트명: 파워잉글리쉬 대표이사 전상현
사업자등록번호: 217-81-44736 통신판매신고번호: 2014-서울도봉-0233호
서울본사: 서울시 노원구 한글비석로 245 두타빌 B동 7층 713호
대표번호 1688-8672 개인정보관리 책임자: 안희영 [powerenglish@pweng.net]