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Writing Task:
Please answer the question:
What are the rules you usually break?

The rules are made to be broken (it's kidding)
I sometimes break small rules.
Like a skip the school, late the school, and
not submit smartphones when I was a teenage student etc..
On some day when I was a student, I didn't submit my smartphone, later my phone ring during class
and then, the my teacher confiscated my phone.
At that time, punishment at school was confiscated for one to two weeks.
I'm not smartphone addiction, but I felt empty and other friends didn't submit it well.
However, I got over come it quickly.
Because I used another smartphone at home.
Anyway, I think may as well keep the rules.

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Good day, Keon!
Thank you so much for taking time in answering the question. Your ideas and opinions are on point. Keep it up! :)
~ T. Camille

Writing Task:
Please answer the question:
What are the rules you usually break?


The rules are made to be broken (it's kidding)
>> The rules are made to be broken (just kidding).
I sometimes break small rules.
>> CORRECT! 
Like a skip the school, late the school, and not submit smartphones when I was a teenage student etc..
>> Some of those rules include skipping classes, tardiness, and not submitting smartphones when I was a high school student.
On some day when I was a student, I didn't submit my smartphone, later my phone ring during class and then, the my teacher confiscated my phone.
>> There was a time when I was a student, I didn't submit my smartphone, later my phone rang during class, then my teacher confiscated my phone.
At that time, punishment at school was confiscated for one to two weeks.
>> At that time, the punishment at school was to confiscate and keep the phone for one to two weeks.
I'm not smartphone addiction, but I felt empty and other friends didn't submit it well.
>> I don't have a smartphone addiction, but I felt empty and other friends didn't submit it well.
However, I got over come it quickly.
>> However, I got over it quickly.
Because I used another smartphone at home.
>> That's because I used another smartphone at home.
Anyway, I think may as well keep the rules.
>> Anyway, I think we might as well keep the rules.

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