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I have always wanted to take a break and travel the world.
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Thank you for accomplishing your homework! Writing some sentences in English also contribute to your constant practice. Stay positive, work hard, and success will be knocking on your door. Keep up the good work! I believe in you. See you in class!



Regards,

Teacher Lexie

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I have always wanted to take a break and travel the world.
>> CORRECT!
Nowadays, i¡¯m taking a break from university and sometime i¡¯m traveling.
>> Currently, I¡¯m taking a break from university and sometimes I¡¯m traveling.
this is what i already achieved the goal.
>> This is the goal that I have already achieved so far.
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