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We are suffering from the anxiety of ourbreaking of war like this.

Of course, it is true that we become insensitive more and more than un the past.

We don't even teach the real situation of North Korea in school from the last government.

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Hi, Ms. Lily! How are you?
I appreciate you once again for writing your thoughts here. I guess this is also a sensitive matter for some people that the government must be cautious when they are providing or sending online messages. See you later.
Aki~

We are suffering from the anxiety of ourbreaking of war like this.
>>> We are suffering from the anxiety of the outbreak of war like this.

Of course, it is true that we become insensitive more and more than in the past.
>>> CORRECT!

We don't even teach the real situation of North Korea in school from the last government.
>>> CORRECT!
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