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What do I think to eat convenient store lunch boxes for lunch?

작성자: 김*호
2023-06-14 2091

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Honestly, I think eating convenient store lunch boxes is reasonable choice for worker like me.

There are some reasons why I think so.

First, if I eat that kind of lunch box instead of eating lunch in food store or restaurant, I can save money and time.
Price gap between lunch box and eating in restaurant for lunch will be at least 5 $ per day and if I save that money during a month, I can save my money 100 $.
And also, if I eat lunch box in office, I can save my lunch time at least 30 minutes so during that time, I can study or find some information to invest my future even time is quite short to spend.

Second one is, I can adjust or lose my weight by eating lunch box.
Nowadays, many worker like me are usually overweight due to excessive nutrition.
And lunch box's price become more expensive and the composition in lunch box also become worse than before.
So if I eat this lunch box, I can't provide excessive nutrition for my body and it will be followed by lose one's weight.

강사님의 첨삭교정 내용

Hello Kyoung Ho. Thank you so much for this. Keep them coming!

Honestly, I think eating convenient store lunch boxes is reasonable choice for worker like me.
>>> Honestly, I think eating convenient store lunch boxes is a reasonable choice for worker like me.  
There are some reasons why I think so.
>>>  correct 
First, if I eat that kind of lunch box instead of eating lunch in food store or restaurant, I can save money and time.
>>>  correct 
Price gap between lunch box and eating in restaurant for lunch will be at least 5 $ per day and if I save that money during a month, I can save my money 100 $.
>>> Price gap between lunch box and eating in restaurant for lunch will be at least $5 per day and if I save that money for a month, I can save my money $100.  
And also, if I eat lunch box in office, I can save my lunch time at least 30 minutes so during that time, I can study or find some information to invest my future even time is quite short to spend.
>>>  And also, if I eat a lunch box in the office, I can save at least 30 minutes of my lunch time. During that time, I can study or find some information to invest my future in even if the time is quite short to spend. 
Second one is, I can adjust or lose my weight by eating lunch box.
>>> The second one is I can adjust or lose my weight by eating lunch box.  
Nowadays, many worker like me are usually overweight due to excessive nutrition.
>>>  correct 
And lunch box's price become more expensive and the composition in lunch box also become worse than before.
>>>  In addition, lunch box's price has become more expensive and the ingredients in lunch box also become worse than before. 
So if I eat this lunch box, I can't provide excessive nutrition for my body and it will be followed by lose one's weight.
>>>  So if I eat this lunch box, It wouldn't provide excessive calorie for my body and it will be followed by losing one's weight.  
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