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I want to go back in 2015. I was a middle school student. I played soccer everyday and I didn¡¯t have a concern about my future. I had a girlfriend too. However I went a lot of academies for studying because my mother couldn¡¯t care me and wanted to be smart. Therefore, I want to be a middle school student one more, and enjoy my school life.

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Happy Wednesday, Robin!
I am also thinking the same way. When we were young, we don't have to worry about anything. It would be nice if we can go back to those times and at the same time, appreciate those moments.
-T. Caitlyn
I want to go back in 2015. 
>> I want to go back to 2015. 
I was a middle school student. 
>> CORRECT
I played soccer everyday and I didn¡¯t have a concern about my future. 
>> I played soccer every day, and I didn't have a concern about my future.
I had a girlfriend too.
>> CORRECT
However I went a lot of academies for studying because my mother couldn¡¯t care me and wanted to be smart. 
>> However, I studied in a lot of academies because my mother couldn't take care of me and wanted me to be smart.
Therefore, I want to be a middle school student one more, and enjoy my school life.
>> Therefore, I want to be a middle school student once more and enjoy my school life.
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