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I think the death penalty should also be applied.

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I hate avoiding punishment by law because they are disabled.

I think Humans feel sorry for them because they are worse off than themselves.
So avoiding the death penalty for having a mental disability is probably people feel sorry for them.
But I think if they are the one who have committed the crime, hose who have committed the crime deserve the punishment they deserve.
I think it's against equity if they get a lower punishment than others because they have a disability.

So I think the death penalty should also be applied.

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Hi Da Hye,

 

Thank you for completing the homework and sharing your thoughts. It's important to consider fairness and empathy when discussing punishment and disabilities. While some may feel sorry for individuals with disabilities, it's essential to ensure fairness in the legal system. You believe that those who commit crimes, regardless of disabilities, should receive appropriate punishment. It's clear that you have a strong viewpoint on the topic of the death penalty and disabilities. However, understanding different perspectives is important, and it's valuable to continue exploring and developing your critical thinking skills. See you later. ^^

~Teacher Cathy

 

I think Humans feel sorry for them because they are worse off than themselves.

>> I think humans feel sorry for them because they are worse off than themselves.

OR>> I think humans feel sorry for them because they are in a worse situation than themselves.

So avoiding the death penalty for having a mental disability is probably people feel sorry for them.

>>So, avoiding the death penalty for having a mental disability is probably because people feel sorry for them.

But I think if they are the one who have committed the crime, hose who have committed the crime deserve the punishment they deserve.

>>But I think if they are the one who has committed the crime, they deserve to be punished.

I think it's against equity if they get a lower punishment than others because they have a disability.

>>I believe it's not fair if they receive a lighter punishment just because they have a disability.

So I think the death penalty should also be applied.

>>CORRECT

OR>>That¡¯s why I think the death penalty should also be applied to them.

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