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My best trip ever

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My best trip was in New Zeleand.
When I was in New Zeleand for studing English I went on trip in Christmas holidays with a classmate.
We rented a car amd drove around the south island of New Zeleand. We did not have much money because we were students. So we slept in the tent it was too cold even It was summer. I was so happy even I could not sleep well. I saw great scenery. I have not seen ever. I saw glacler, lakes and Mount.

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Hi, Thomas! Thank you for answering your homework. Keep up the effort in learning and practicing English.


-Teacher Joy
My best trip was in New Zeleand.
>> My best trip was in New Zealand.
When I was in New Zeleand for studing English I went on trip in Christmas holidays with a classmate.
>> When I was in New Zealand studying English, I went on a trip during the Christmas holidays with a classmate.

We rented a car amd drove around the south island of New Zeleand.
>>  We rented a car and drove around the South Island of New Zealand.

We did not have much money because we were students. 
>> Correct
So we slept in the tent it was too cold even It was summer.
>> So we slept in a tent, even though it was too cold, even though it was summer.

I was so happy even I could not sleep well.
>> I was so happy, even though I couldn't sleep well.
I saw great scenery.
>> I saw great sceneries.

I have not seen ever.
>> Correct
I saw glacler, lakes and Mount.
>> I saw glaciers, lakes, and mountains.
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