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What do you do when you feel burned out?

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2023-06-20 1897

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When I worn-out, I try to not think of anything. But it's hard especially for me to focus on the present. Actually, I think I am burned out now. However, there are so many things to do and even I cannot rest because of the anxiety. If I don't move busily, the works never end even though I'm tired of my schedule. So I have to arrange my tasks to fulfill my duty. And then I can put down my burdens.
When I worry about something, I'm consoled by my family. Last weekend, I went to my hometown, in spite of the exams for this week. Also, I try to think positively like 'I can do it' and 'Time goes by' and it's not that easy. But I think this is a only thing that I can do and overcome the situation.
Furthermore, the most important thing when I feel nervous is does not overwhelmed by fear. Normally, the mind of fear is loom large against the real state. So, changing negative thoughts to positive could be the best way to pass through the slump.

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Thank you, Ko Eun!
I really appreciate that you spend time answering your homework. It's nice that you have a support system, like your family, that you can lean on when you are worn out. Great job in this homework, you improved a lot when it comes to your writing skills.
-T. Caitlyn
When I worn-out, I try to not think of anything. 
>> When I'm worn out, I try to not think of anything. 
But it's hard especially for me to focus on the present. 
>> CORRECT
Actually, I think I am burned out now. 
>> CORRECT
However, there are so many things to do and even I cannot rest because of the anxiety.
>> CORRECT
 If I don't move busily, the works never end even though I'm tired of my schedule. 
>> CORRECT
So I have to arrange my tasks to fulfill my duty. 
>> CORRECT
And then I can put down my burdens.
>> CORRECT
When I worry about something, I'm consoled by my family. 
>> CORRECT
Last weekend, I went to my hometown, in spite of the exams for this week. 
>> CORRECT
Also, I try to think positively like 'I can do it' and 'Time goes by' and it's not that easy. 
>> CORRECT
But I think this is a only thing that I can do and overcome the situation.
>> But I think this is the only thing that I can do and overcome the situation.
Furthermore, the most important thing when I feel nervous is does not overwhelmed by fear. 
>> Furthermore, the most important thing when I feel nervous is to not be overwhelmed by fear. 
Normally, the mind of fear is loom large against the real state. 
>> CORRECT
So, changing negative thoughts to positive could be the best way to pass through the slump.
>> So, changing negative thoughts to positive ones could be the best way to overcome the slump.
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