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I have a passion to learn the language. I've been studying English for almost 2 years by now. When I master it, I'm going to study a second foreign language about French. If I can know other languages, I could see the more broad perspective than before. That's why I want to learn. :)

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Hello, Elic! Challenge yourself to do better each time and to improve yourself with each step. Your goals will be met if you put out your best effort. You did wonderful day! Keep it up. I am always here for you. Fighting!

I have a passion to learn the language.
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I've been studying English for almost 2 years by now.
>>> I've been studying English for almost 2 years now.

When I master it, I'm going to study a second foreign language about French.
>>> When I master it, I'm going to study a second foreign language, like French.

If I can know other languages, I could see the more broad perspective than before. 
>>> If I knew other languages, I could see things from a more broad perspective than before.

That's why I want to learn.
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