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What is the best age to have a baby? Why?

작성자: 엄*주
2023-07-10 3361

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I believe that the best age to have a baby is 30years olds. Despite appropriate age for having a baby is differ from case by case, I believe 30 years old is the best age for both of physical and financial aspect.
Firstly, 30 years old is existed between too much and too young for having a baby. Obviously, these days people are starting to have a sufficient prepare time for having a baby. However, it is not good for babies and mothers to have a baby when woman is getting old. More age that people have a baby, more risk will be increased. In doing so, 30 years old is not too late age to have a baby.

Moreover, most of 30 age years old people can make a enough preparation to have a baby. This is because people have had effort on getting a job when they are 20s. As a result, most of 30s people would more afford to raise a baby than they were 20s.

강사님의 첨삭교정 내용

Hey Yun Jun!

In my opinion, There's no perfect age to have kids. Yes, scientific data is clear. The “right” age to have a child according to your biological clock is under 35 for women and under 40 for men. However, I do believe it's a matter of person's choice. ^^ 

- Kristine ^^ 

I believe that the best age to have a baby is 30years olds. 
>> I believe that 30 years old is the ideal age to have a child. 
Despite appropriate age for having a baby is differ from case by case, 
>> Although the best age to have a child varies depending on each person.
I believe 30 years old is the best age for both of physical and financial aspect.
>> Correct. 
Firstly, 30 years old is existed between too much and too young for having a baby. 
>> Firstly, 30 years old is somewhere between being too old or too young to have a child. 
Obviously, these days people are starting to have a sufficient prepare time for having a baby. 
>> It's obvious that people need time to prepare before having a baby.
However, it is not good for babies and mothers to have a baby when woman is getting old. 
>> However, having a baby as a woman ages is bad for both the baby and the mother. 
More age that people have a baby, more risk will be increased. 
>> The risk increases as individuals become older and have children. 
In doing so, 30 years old is not too late age to have a baby.
>> In this case, 30 is not too old to have a child.
Moreover, most of 30 age years old people can make a enough preparation to have a baby. 
>> Additionally, most adults over the age of 30 can prepare themselves well for childbirth. 
This is because people have had effort on getting a job when they are 20s. 
>> This has happened because people have worked hard to find jobs in their 20s. 
As a result, most of 30s people would more afford to raise a baby than they were 20s.
>> Therefore, most people in their 30s could afford to raise a child compared to their 20s.
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