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TOPIC: Describe that most recent vacation that you had.
Where did you go?
Who did you go with?
What did you do?
What did you enjoy the most?
Would you like to go back there again?

I went to jeju island in most recent with my friends we did a lot of things like paragling, riding a hores, fishing in sea and even climed hanla mountain.
among them i most like is climed mountain
I didnt enjoy because its so hard
but it is most remember
I dont want to go back there again :)

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Hello, Min Seog! You are really getting better in explaining your answers in the homework using longer sentences. Great job! Just continue doing your best so that you can continue to improve your skills and make them better. Keep it up! See you in class. ~ T. Marie ^^ 
I went to jeju island in most recent with my friends we did a lot of things like paragling, riding a hores, fishing in sea and even climed hanla mountain.
>> In my most recent trip, I went to Jeju island with my friends. 
>> We did a lot of things such as paragliding, riding horse, fishing in the sea, and even climbing Hanla Mountain. 
among them i most like is climed mountain
>> Among these things, I really liked climbing the mountain. 
I didnt enjoy because its so hard
>> I didn't enjoy it because it's too hard. 
but it is most remember
>> But it is what I remember the most. 
I dont want to go back there again :)
>> I don't want to go back there again :)
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