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Are people obsessed with appearance today? Why or why not?

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Relatively with past, these day people don¡¯t be obsessed with appearance. Because people know just ¡®appearance¡¯ is not that important. Their own characteristic and uniqueness are more important than appearance. Eventhough social recognition is changed, some people are obsessed with appearance. But they have to know there is no fixed standard to appearance.

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I am glad we are on the same page, Jenna! Outward appearance is important, but our characters matter most. -Faith-
Relatively with past, these day people don¡¯t be obsessed with appearance. Because people know just ¡®appearance¡¯ is not that important. 
>> Relatively in the past, people were not obsessed with appearance because they knew that ¡®appearance¡¯ was not that important. 
Their own characteristic and uniqueness are more important than appearance. 
>> Their own characteristic and uniqueness were more important than appearance. 
Eventhough social recognition is changed, some people are obsessed with appearance. 
>> Even though social recognition has changed, some people are obsessed with appearance. 
But they have to know there is no fixed standard to appearance.
>> However, they have to know there is no fixed standard for appearance.
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