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It is not a natural phenomenon in some parts.

Social media make compulse and compare with others in many cases even summer vacation.

People need to show envious travel story and photo to show others despite financial constraints.

The number of people living as the salve of SNS is increasing.

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Great day, Ms. Lily!
I would have to agree with you that many people are encouraged and envious because of what other people have posted on their social media, but if they understand and know he aftermath of traveling even with financial constraints then they would try to plan something that will not compromise their finances. 
Have a great weekend.
Aki~

It is not a natural phenomenon in some parts
>>>  CORRECT!

Social media make compulse and compare with others in many cases even summer vacation.
>>>  Social media make compulsive and compare with others in many cases even summer vacation.

People need to show envious travel story and photo to show others despite financial constraints.
>>> People need to show envious travel stories and photos to show others despite financial constraints.

The number of people living as the salve of SNS is increasing.
>>>  The number of people living as a slave of SNS is increasing.
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