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That\'s because everyone has different genes and environments.

작성자: 윤*혜
2023-07-28 3447

회원님의 영작문

That's because everyone has different genes and environments.
Genes are received from parents.
For example, if a parent has a genetic disease, there will be a fear of the disease because the child is likely to be born with it.
And the environment is like a situation that was created whether I wanted to or not.
For example, drowning will lead to fear of water, and abuse will lead to fear of violence.
All of these factors seem like people have different fears.

강사님의 첨삭교정 내용

Hello Da Hye,

I'm really impressed with how you talked about genes and environments making us different. Your example about genetic diseases and how kids can worry about getting them was really smart. And I understood how our surroundings can affect our fears with the drowning and abuse examples. Keep up the awesome work, and I'm excited to see more of your great ideas!

~Teacher Cathy


That's because everyone has different genes and environments.

>>CORRECT

OR>> It happens because everyone carries different genes and lives in different environments.
Genes are received from parents.

>> CORRECT

OR>> Genes are passed down from our parents.
For example, if a parent has a genetic disease, there will be a fear of the disease because the child is likely to be born with it.

>> CORRECT

OR>>For instance, if a parent has a genetic illness, the child might worry about getting the same disease because it could be passed down.
And the environment is like a situation that was created whether I wanted to or not.

>> The environment is like a situation that was created whether I wanted to or not.
For example, drowning will lead to fear of water, and abuse will lead to fear of violence.

>> For example, drowning will lead to a fear of water, and abuse will lead to a fear of violence.
All of these factors seem like people have different fears.

>> All of these factors contribute to people having different fears.

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