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I think it's natural to take responsibility for the consequences of my actions. You will be able to have trust and pride because of the choice you take responsibility. To do this, it seems that we need to think carefully before taking action. And if someone is harmed or hurt by my actions, I will need the courage to admit my mistake, apologize, and be punished for it.

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Great day, Eliana!
Thank you once again for this. You are a sensible person if you admit and take responsible of your actions.
Have a nice day!
Aki~

I think it's natural to take responsibility for the consequences of my actions.
>>> CORRECT!

You will be able to have trust and pride because of the choice you take responsibility.
>>> CORRECT!

To do this, it seems that we need to think carefully before taking action.
>>> CORRECT!

And if someone is harmed or hurt by my actions, I will need the courage to admit my mistake, apologize, and be punished for it.
>>> CORRECT!
OR >>> And if someone is harmed or hurt by my actions, I will have the courage to admit my mistake, apologize, and be responsible for it.
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