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What are some ways in saving the earth?

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We have a lot of ways how to save our energy. We can save the earth by unplugging appliances when we don't use, decrease our shower time, sort out recycle trash and so on. These are the ways that we can do it in our living and we have to make an effort to save the earth.

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Hi, Daisy. Thank you for always doing a great job in answering your homework. Please take note of the corrections I made on your homework. Keep up the good work and see you in class! ^^
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We have a lot of ways how to save our energy.
>> Correct 
We can save the earth by unplugging appliances when we don't use, decrease our shower time, sort out recycle trash and so on.
>> We can help save the Earth by unplugging appliances when we don't use them, reducing our shower time, sorting out recyclable trash, and more.
These are the ways that we can do it in our living and we have to make an effort to save the earth.
>>Correct
OR >> These are the ways we can contribute in our daily lives, and we must make an effort to save the Earth.
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