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~ Writing Task:
Please answer the question:
Do you think electricity is the greatest invention ever?

Absolutely right! Electricity is the greatest invention.
If no electricity even now, we maybe still be living in primitive times.
First of all, familiar electronic devices would not has existed.
And we spend a terrible time summer and winter, because we can't use an air conditioner and a heater.
Sometimes, I fall into an unusual imagination about if disappear the electric.
If disappear the electric, most of we daily life will be destroyed.
First of all, we can't use all the electricity and also we can't do the almost work.
In my country, run campaigns to save electricity in crowded location like a school, companies, and subways.
This campaigns is turn off electricity for a few minutes and save electricity.

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Good day, Keon!
Thank you so much for taking time in answering the question. Your ideas and opinions are on point. Keep it up! :)
~ T. Camille


~ Writing Task:
Please answer the question:
Do you think electricity is the greatest invention ever?


Absolutely right! Electricity is the greatest invention.
>> CORRECT!
If no electricity even now, we maybe still be living in primitive times.
>> If there's no electricity even now, we may still be living in primitive times.
First of all, familiar electronic devices would not has existed.
>> First of all, familiar electronic devices would not exist.
And we spend a terrible time summer and winter, because we can't use an air conditioner and a heater.
>> CORRECT!
Sometimes, I fall into an unusual imagination about if disappear the electric.
>> Sometimes, I fall into an unusual imagination about the disappearance of electricity.
If disappear the electric, most of we daily life will be destroyed.
>> If electricity disappears, people will suffer on a daily basis.
First of all, we can't use all the electricity and also we can't do the almost work.
>> First of all, we can't use all the electricity, and we can't do most of the work.
In my country, run campaigns to save electricity in crowded location like a school, companies, and subways.
>> In my country, run campaigns to save electricity happen in crowded locations like schools, companies, and subways.
This campaigns is turn off electricity for a few minutes and save electricity.
>> This campaign's aim is to let people turn off the electricity for a few minutes and save electricity.

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