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HOMEWORK FOR TODAY:
ESSAY: Some people believe that money is the major source of happiness. Do you agree or disagree?

I agree with this opinion. Money is one of the most important source of happiness.
But, It must be method, don't have to be result.
Money is the better component than other option but, it isn't the best component in our life.

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Hi Lee! Thanks for doing your essay. I hope you'll have a great week!
>>> TEACHER GEMMA
I agree with this opinion. 
>>> CORRECT~!^^
Money is one of the most important sources of happiness.
>>> CORRECT~!^^
But, It must be method, don't have to be result.
>>> But, it has to be used in a more reasonable way.
Money is the better component than the other option but, it isn't the best component in our life.
>>> CORRECT~!^^
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