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HOMEWORK FOR TODAY:
ESSAY: It is necessary for parents to attend a parenting training course to bring their children up. Do you agree or disagree?

I agree with this opinion. I think that parents help children. But they don't help them directly.
Parents just become adviser. If mother teaches how to eat, she doesn't scoop thier child the meal.
This is the same any other situation.
In a nutshell, child's education needs a little encouragements or tips, not care.

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Hi there Lee! Thanks for doing your essay again! Keep writing to speak up your mind. See you~! ^^
>>> TEACHER GEMMA
I agree with this opinion.
>>> CORRECT~!^^
 I think that parents help children. 
>>> I think, parents should help their children. 
But they don't help them directly.
>>> CORRECT~!^^
Parents just become adviser.
>>> Parents role are just advisers. 
If mother teaches how to eat, she doesn't scoop thier child the meal.
>>> If mothers teach their children how to eat, they don't scoop the food for them. 
This is the same any other situation.
>>> It's the same in all situations. 
In a nutshell, child's education needs a little encouragements or tips, not care.
>>> CORRECT~!^^
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