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I am passionate about writing music, especially when I get a request to compose a music, I only focus on my composition. I often forget the meal time and don¡¯t take a rest during the process of my work. So it causes me back pain, neck pain and eye discomfort. But it is a great pleasure for me to make it, if the result come out well.

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Good day, Seung Ki! I'm surprised that you are a composer. Your passions keeps filled with meaning, happiness, and excitement. Keep doing what you love, but don't forget to take care of yourself in the process. We will talk more in class. I'm looking forward to hearing your ideas.~ T. Lyn
I am passionate about writing music, especially when I get a request to compose a music, I only focus on my composition.
>>I have a passion for composition, so when a request comes in, I focus only on doing it.
I often forget the meal time and don¡¯t take a rest during the process of my work. 
>>I often forget abut mealtimes and don't take breaks in the work process.
So it causes me back pain, neck pain and eye discomfort.
>>This causes back pain, neck pain, and eye discomfort.
But it is a great pleasure for me to make it, if the result come out well.
>>But when the results come out well, it is a great pleasure for me and I am proud of myself.
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