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The regard of human right is distorted in Korean society.

Historically there were many dictators who limited abd suppressed human rights for long time.

Ironically now the human rights of good people are threatened by criminal, disruptor, and harmers.

Protecting all criminals is the law of human rights.

The problem is not respecting other's human rights.

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The regard of human right is distorted in Korean society.
>>> The regard of human rights is distorted in Korean society.

Historically there were many dictators who limited abd suppressed human rights for long time.
>>> Historically there were many dictators who limited and suppressed human rights for a long time.

Ironically now the human rights of good people are threatened by criminal, disruptor, and harmers.
>>> Ironically now the human rights of good people are threatened by criminals, disruptors, and harmers.

Protecting all criminals is the law of human rights.
>>> CORRECT!

The problem is not respecting others' human rights.
>>> CORRECT!
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